10月30日雅思考试回顾丨大作文范文及解析

发布日期:2021-11-12 浏览次数:373

10月30日大作文题目:

Nowadays parents put a lot of pressure on their children to succeed.
What is the reason for doing this? Is this a positive or negative development?


【话题分类】

家庭教育类


【题目解析】

题目大意:现在很多父母对孩子施加大量压力,要求他们取得成功。
题型特点:两问组合题型,要注意在文中对原因和态度都要有展开论证,不能忽略其中一个方面。
本文结构:开头段引入话题和表明立场、第一个主体段介绍现象的成形原因、第二个主体段呈现作者对话题的评价、结尾重申观点。
【难点】题目的核心是家庭教育范畴中的虎妈现象。思路构建应该注意将概念(如success、pressure)具体化、提供相关的细节内容,而不是单纯重复父母要求孩子成功这个笼统概念。

【写作思路】

开头段:有一种情况越来越普遍——父母要求孩子在学校和其他竞争环境中出类拔萃,往往以牺牲大部分其他兴趣为代价。赞成者认为,这种以结果为导向的方法是不得已而为之,可以让年轻的学习者在成年前获得竞争优势,防止错过宝贵的机会或进步太慢。这种说法有道理吗?


主体段1:采取严格的虎妈式教养有两个主要原因。其中最广为人知的是稀缺性引起的恐惧。另一个原因是认为成绩等同于能力。


主体段2:过分关注结果的后果可能很严重。一个主要问题是对技能发展的长期影响。另外,父母对优秀的高度重视也会造成疏远感,降低自尊心。


结尾段:总的来说,尽管对最好的教育和职业的竞争很激烈,但要求自己的孩子在学校和其他地方只做最好的,并不是最明智的做法。相反,应该关注他们的长期成长和幸福所需要的东西。


考范文

It has been increasingly common for parents to require their children to excel at school and in other competitive environments, often at the price of sacrificing most other interests. This result-oriented approach is, according to those in favour of it, a necessary evil to give young learners a competitive edge before they reach adulthood, preventing them from missing precious opportunities or progressing too slowly. Is this claim justified?


There are two main reasons for adopting a strict tiger parenting style. The one that attracts the most publicity is scarcity-induced fear. The fact that academic excellence is the main admission factor for top schools and colleges means that when parents arrange their children’s schedule, they tend to prioritize resume-worthy activities and expect them to produce results that justify the time and money invested. Another reason is the perception that performance equals competence. Rather than encouraging their children to explore and find their passion, many are more concerned with their exams and contest results and so leave their learning needs and potential unattended.


The natural consequences of paying too much attention to results can be serious. A major problem is the long-term effect on skill development. Being trained to achieve good grades and win competitions does not mean that children have developed independent thinking and communication skills, essential assets of functioning members of society. Also, the parents’ high regard for excellence can create a sense of alienation and lower self-esteem. Given high levels of academic pressure, young learners may face harsh criticism which creates self-doubt about their abilities and intelligence, resulting in an impression that they are unworthy of their parents’ attention. 


In general, although competition is fierce for the best education and career, demanding one’s children to be nothing but the best at school and elsewhere is not the wisest approach. Alternatively, attention should be paid to what they need for their long-term growth and happiness.


(315 words)


【语言积累】

1.to excel 表现卓越2.result-oriented approach 以结果为导向的方式3.a necessary evil 不得不做之事4.a competitive edge 竞争优势5.a strict tiger parenting style 严厉的虎妈式教养6.resume-worthy activities 能写进简历的活动7.leave their learning needs and potential unattended 忽略学习需求和潜能8.essential assets of 重要资产9.a sense of alienation and lower self-esteem 疏离感和自卑10.unworthy of their parents’ attention 不值得父母关注